Some people think that men are naturally more competitive then women. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Nowadays competitive
nature
is help to people
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is helping people
is helping to people
to get a success in
life
. Some school of thoughts
consider
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considers
that the men are naturally more competitive
then
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than
women
.
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.
I will discuss both views in
upcoming paragraphs
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the upcoming paragraphs
.
First
of all
,
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,
everyone
have
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has
competitive
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a competitive nature
nature
because everyone wants to get success with the help of competition. Nowadays, all people do competition in their
life
. Men and women
Thay
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They
That
both have
competitive
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a competitive nature
nature
.
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.
Women are more competitive because women
are vary
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vary
punctual in
life
rether
on the contrary
rather
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
men thay
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men, they
men they
men that
are more polite by
nature they
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nature, they
do
work
with politeness or with very good way
.
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.
Women can manage many works in one day like they do the household
work
as well as do jobs. Probing
further
, women are
mentaly
in your mind
mentally
strong and women have more ability
rether
on the contrary
rather
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
men to manage any
work
alone but
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alone, but
men are dependent on women like for food
,
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,
for
clothes for
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clothes, for
caring their family and
any where
at or in or to any place
anywhere
but women can survive alone in their
life
.
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.
Women stand with men to joint shoulder because women do more
work
or earn much money
rether
on the contrary
rather
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
men. On
other hand
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the other hand
, men have
also
so much
responsibilities
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responsibility
of their
work
, family. Men have much money to fulfil their family's needs, give them
happiness but
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happiness, but
women have
responsibility
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the responsibility
of their family or their household works. Men do a lot of
work
for their family not for their self. To sum up, men and women they both have need for each other in
life
.As women are equal to men.
Although
in many ways which requires
physically
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physical
stronth
the property of being physically or mentally strong
strength
or power to
attempt but
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attempt, but
ladies
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the ladies
also
hold the right to be treated as men.

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