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Some people say that protecting the environment is government's responsibility. Others believe that every individual should take responsibility for it. Discuss views and give your own opinion.

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Environment is the basic source for living beings to live. A few people opine that protecting the environment is accountability of legal authorities, while others contradict it, and believe that it should be the responsibility of every person.
This
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 essay will discuss both the views in the subsequent paragraphs and provide my rational opinion before conclusion. To commence with, government can make people motivate to save
biosphere
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the biosphere
. Because an individual cannot take the biggest step alone, he needs some appreciation from authorities.
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, a human being is more aware about saving
nature
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 by the initial step of state authorities.
Moreover
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, higher legal bodies can make small changes by putting some important steps towards
protection
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the protection
 of
nature
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. To demonstrate,
ban
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the ban
a ban
bans
 on plastic use can make a little change and save the biosphere to some extent.
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addition government
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addition, government
 may organise some exhibitions to aware masses to protect
nature
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.
On the other hand
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, every individual is responsible to make the surrounding clean and protected for future generations.
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,
although
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 authority can make policies, but they can be implemented only by the general public. Group of persons should not accept the over packing, it can reduce the use of plastic.
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, collective group of people should take care of their surrounded places. More places can be saved by installing some dustbins around the parks and public places. Apart from that,
beaches
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the beaches
may maintained
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may maintain
 by
collective efforts
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the collective efforts
 of human beings. To conclude,
although
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government
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the government
 is making plans and policies to protect
nature
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 for future. But in my prospective, individuals are responsible for making the environment safe and secure for upcoming generations.
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, each individual should have the concern to sound environmental protection.

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