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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

#places #homes #space #countryside #people
Many people argue that free
community
 services should be made a mandatory part of high
school
 programs. I agree that
community
 services can be made compulsory in high
school
 programs.
However
, many students believe that all
community
 services shouldn'
t
 be free.
Firstly
, by doing and participating in all these
community
service
 programs
such
 as charity, improving the
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
 or teaching sports to younger
children high
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children, high
school
 students can develop their skills as well as learn many things while interacting with other people. They can provide a free
service
 while volunteering in
community
service
 related
works like
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works, like
 charity, donation, helping the homeless or cleaning the
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
. It will both help society as well as the environment. Though providing all these services can add an extra remark on their portfolio, they shouldn'
t
 always provide all the services without getting paid.
Moreover
, if the high
school
 programmes make all these works mandatory for high
school
 students and force them to do all the
community
 services without getting paid or some reward, it would be unjust to them.
As a result
, they won'
t
 be interested in doing quality
service
 and may not provide enough effort to do the tasks.
Finally
, some services can be made compulsory and unpaid like the services related to charity and
environment but
Suggestion
the environment, but
the environment but
 the rest of the services shouldn'
t
 be made compulsory or totally free so that students will earn or get a reward and will make everyone happy as well as satisfied with their work. In conclusion, Some
community
 services can be made free and compulsory for high
school
 students in the high
school
 programmes and other services like teaching could be provided with an adequate amount of payment so that most students will get interested and providing the
community
service
.

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  • Eco-friendly building materials
  • Green architecture
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