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The quality of computer language translation has improved significantly in recent years. Therefore it is not necessary for children to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#quality #computer #language #translation #years #children
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The quality of
computer
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language
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translation
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 has improved significantly in recent years.
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Therefore it
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Therefore, it
 is not necessary for children to learn a foreign
language
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. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Globally information technology has greatly improved
language
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translation
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 in the present years,
as a
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result many
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result, many
 feel it is a waste of time and effort to be able to communicate in a foreign
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. In my opinion, I disagree with
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,
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however I
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however, I
also
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 believe that the impact of information technology cannot be completely ruled out. Access to
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computer
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computers
a computer
the computer
 is limited in many countries of the world today and many of these countries cannot rely solely on
computer
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 that are unavailable to communicate.
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, in many parts of Nigeria today, most farmers and low-income earners cannot afford to buy computers.
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, Most computers are sophisticated and difficult to operate. Communication via these types of
computers especially
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computers, especially
 for non-educated individuals may be
an
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a
herculean
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Herculean
 task.
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Finally it
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Finally, it
 is cheaper to learn a foreign
language
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 than to purchase and maintain computers. Not all
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computer
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computers
 have features of
language
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 translations, the latest models that have
such
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 features are expensive and may require monthly subscriptions to enjoy the
translation
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 features,
as a
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result many
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result, many
 people who cannot afford
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 will have to learn a foreign
language
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 to be able to communicate effectively.
On the other hand
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,
computer
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language
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translation
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 has helped to break communication and
language
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 barriers in various aspects of life. Take
for instance
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, in the movie
industry many
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industry, many
 of these films today have features of subtitles which make it easier for viewers to better understand these movies. Through
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language
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translation
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, verbal communication has
also
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 greatly improved. In conclusion,
computer
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language
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translation
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 is one of the greatest and useful invention in the world of information technology in recent
years but
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years, but
 to say children should not learn a foreign
language
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 because of
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 should not be encouraged.

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