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The quality of computer language translation has improved significantly in recent years. Therefore it is not necessary for children to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The quality of
computer
language
translation
 has improved significantly in recent years.
Therefore it
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Therefore, it
 is not necessary for children to learn a foreign
language
. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Globally information technology has greatly improved
language
translation
 in the present years,
as a
result many
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result, many
 feel it is a waste of time and effort to be able to communicate in a foreign
language
. In my opinion, I disagree with
this
,
however I
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however, I
also
 believe that the impact of information technology cannot be completely ruled out. Access to
computer
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computers
a computer
the computer
 is limited in many countries of the world today and many of these countries cannot rely solely on
computer
 that are unavailable to communicate.
For example
, in many parts of Nigeria today, most farmers and low-income earners cannot afford to buy computers.
Additionally
, Most computers are sophisticated and difficult to operate. Communication via these types of
computers especially
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computers, especially
 for non-educated individuals may be
an
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a
herculean
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Herculean
 task.
Finally it
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Finally, it
 is cheaper to learn a foreign
language
 than to purchase and maintain computers. Not all
computer
Suggestion
computers
 have features of
language
 translations, the latest models that have
such
 features are expensive and may require monthly subscriptions to enjoy the
translation
 features,
as a
result many
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result, many
 people who cannot afford
this
 will have to learn a foreign
language
 to be able to communicate effectively.
On the other hand
,
computer
language
translation
 has helped to break communication and
language
 barriers in various aspects of life. Take
for instance
, in the movie
industry many
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industry, many
 of these films today have features of subtitles which make it easier for viewers to better understand these movies. Through
computer
language
translation
, verbal communication has
also
 greatly improved. In conclusion,
computer
language
translation
 is one of the greatest and useful invention in the world of information technology in recent
years but
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years, but
 to say children should not learn a foreign
language
 because of
this
 should not be encouraged.

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