Some people believe that it is the best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Other argue that it is bette to try and improve situation. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

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people should always
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themselves to stand in bad
situation
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situations
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. I
am not totally agree
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do not totally agree
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with it. In my opinion
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selecting the
acceptioin
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exception
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or improvement are both good
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on
situation
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the situation
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. Inprovement should be
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good choice in some
situation
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situations
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.
For example
, money shortage.
This
might happen several
time
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times
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if we lack
of
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manage it. To improve
this
situation
,
first
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first,
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we have to finalize the root cause. Second , we can cut off unnecessary
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expenses
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. And
third,
we can make more money by
sell
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unuse
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unused
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thing
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things
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or
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a past-time
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past-time
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part-time
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job
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jobs
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.
In
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the other hand,
sometime
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sometimes
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we rather accept the bad
situation
in
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the way it is because we
could not
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cannot
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change it.
This
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happens
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all the time in the office. When we are working, we deal with many
kid
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kind
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of person. Some
has
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bad
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a bad
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attitude that
make
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makes
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us feel uncomfortable or we
couldnot
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could not
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avoid to face with
angry
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an angry
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client.
Moreover
, we may not like some of our
duty
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which we need to do.
However
, there are always pros
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and
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cons in every person and job which we should admit it. In conclusion, to accept or improve
are
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our choice. Both are the best
way
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ways
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depend
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on
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the situattion
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situattion
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situation
. We should
chose
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it wisely.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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