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Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. What extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Consumerism reaches a new pinnacle in the modern world.
As a result
 exorbitant amount of goods is sold every day.
Thus
, some people believe that it is because of advertising,
however
, some think reverse of that
.
Accept space
.
 I, personally, agree with the notion which is elaborated
further
. Usage of the advertisements
are
Suggestion
is
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
 aware the new products of an organisation.
However
, advancement in globalization, the company promotes their products in each possible mode. Compared to the past, the limited number of publicity modes available, today, in the contrary, people are fully exposed to advertisement
such
 as in mobile, TV shows and many more. On top of that, application which used in mobile, due to advancement in technology, suggest the product and offer which lure
customer
 more and at the end of the day, the person consumes that product. Another and most important is purchasing power of the
customer
. Earning capacity of employees, nowadays, drastically increase in few decades.
Therefore
,
customer
 consumes goods unconsciously.
Furthermore
, the advertisement is done by famous personalities and allured by graphics and animation
such
 celebrities have their own fan following who endorses the
customer
 to buy and lead to consume the goods. To recapitulate, I reaffirm that advertising
such
 as holdings, TV ads, popup ads and many more exposed every time with us. And what is more, purchase capacity and affordable prices attract more
customer
 than in past/
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