In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family?

There is an argument that
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
on when the elders are taken
care
by
caregivers
by which to paid by
country
or family them
self
. Even though family can pay for the
care
giving person, I highly believe that the cost should be provided by government. On the one hand, the price can be paid by the old people them
self
or their
family but
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family, but
that is
impossible that all the people can pay that.
Firstly
, nowadays many
elder
advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)
older
people are suffered by poorness, if they have to pay for
care
them when they are sick or struggling
in
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with
health issues, that
issues
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issue
will be serious or they could be
died
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dying
in without looking after because of
money
.
For example
,
few years
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a few years
ago
at
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in
my
country
an old lady died alone and people found her body few weeks later after her death, if she had enough
money
and got better
care
she could not die, at least not that miserable situation.
Secondly
, if pay for the price personally, the
care
a motor vehicle with four wheels; usually propelled by an internal combustion engine
car
will not be equal because of
money
again, which is divided by their property, rich people take better
care
that poor people and richer could live longer than others.
Lastly
,
this
can make the issue about pay tax, if they should pay for it them
self
people have to save
money
since
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for
very
young so
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young, so
public
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the public
do not want to pay tax it directly linked to national
competitive
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competition
competitiveness
competitors
.
On the other hand
, if the cost is on the government there are many benefits for the following reasons.
To begin
with, all people can take
care
equally, if the old man or the family have
lot
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lots
of
money
they can pay and get better service than
usual but
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usual, but
in
this
situation everyone has
bottom line
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a bottom line
of the
care
no one will be dropped.
In addition
, if the
country
give
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gives
care
to people when they old, people have
trusty
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trusted
to their
country
, which is connected to rates it will be very helpful to the
country
.
As a result
,
care
giving
nationally
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national
average health of
public
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the public
get
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gets
better and people love their own
country
.
For example
, after some bad events my
country
`s public welfare system is getting better so people getting happier for now. In conclusion,
although
people can pay for
care
giving them
self
, in my point of view, I am convinced that nationally reap more benefits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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