Prevention is better than cure. Out of a country’s health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventive measure. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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has been highlighted as life expectancy prolongs. From

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aspect, questions about whether out of a nation's

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budget

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, a large percentage should be diverted from

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to spending on

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education and preventive action arise. In my opinion, the authorities should spend the

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budget

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education and preventive actions rather than

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to some extent. Irrefutably, an increase in the awareness of

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occurs.

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is because, with the government's support, individuals can learn about a wide range of

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and general symptoms of deadly illness.

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obviously leads to annual medical examinations and

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allows them to early discover the probability of

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as cancer, stroke, and dementia. What is more,

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heavy pressure on the government's

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cannot be overlooked, enormous

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expenses are reduced. In actual fact,

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studies undertaken by experts have revealed that those who are served fundamental medical services strive to exercise to enhance their

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and attempt to avoid harmful foods and habits, so they are less likely to have fatal

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, the support of appropriate

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is significant.

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, since those who suffer from fatal

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struggle with expensive

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expenses, they decide to hold or give up suitable

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on time, so the patient's

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greatly deteriorates.

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, the support of appropriate

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is significant, but an increase in the awareness of

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occurs and enormous

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expenses are reduced.

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, the authorities should spend on

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budget

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for

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education and preventive actions rather than

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