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Some people think that intelligence is innate while others think that we can improve our intelligence through learning. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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No one can judge
intelligence
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looks but
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looks, but
IQ level
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the IQ level
an IQ level
 of any person is considered as perimeter of
intelligence
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.
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, many people debate that high
intelligence
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 is only with them who are smart by birth. In contrary, others argue that it could be achieved with the process of sheer learning.
This
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 essay will discuss both the views and put the
writers
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writer's
 opinion in the end. Looking at the
first
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side
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, which says that innate
intelligence
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 is the real
intelligence
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 because we all have
listened
detected or perceived by the sense of hearing
heard
 and seen the stories of child prodigies who have achieved way more in their childhood
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then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 others could even throughout their career.
For instance
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, the famous story of an
indian
a member of the race of people living in America when Europeans arrived
Indian
 child who can beat calculator or computer when it comes to memory and computation of large numbers. No one can learn
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 talent from any
school but
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school, but
 its pure gift which these people have by birth.Resultantly, nothing can be more handy than natural
intelligence
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. On the other
side
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, there are people who have reached to zenith of their career just because of
persistant
never-ceasing
persistent
 learning and practice
,
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,
even though, if they were not considered as very smart brain in their childhood. One
such
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eample
an item of information that is typical of a class or group
example
 is of Thomas Edison, who failed 100 times in his
eperiments
the act of conducting a controlled test or investigation
experiments
 and still gained the highest reputation as an inventor which others can not match with.
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hapened
come to pass
happened
 only because of his
consistant
(sometimes followed by 'with') in agreement or consistent or reliable
consistent
 approach of learning and gaining from his failures. In conclusion, we have clear
evidance
your basis for belief or disbelief; knowledge on which to base belief
evidence
 of people who are doing great by birth and
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 who have achieved greatness by acquiring knowledge
thoughout
all the way through
throughout
 their lifetime.
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, in my
opinion I
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opinion, I
 will leave
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 to the readers to choose a
side
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 from as I
can not
can not
cannot
 justify which
side
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 outweighs the other.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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