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People from poor and rural backgrounds find it difficulty to get university education. Some people think that the government should make it easier for them to enter universities. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Since the fees of universities are skyrocketing, it gets really difficult for students with poor financial condition to get the tertiary
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. Some people believe that, the government should help
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 students by making the admission process easier. So that, everyone can get the university
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 and
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, any one can get the lucrative job. I totally agree with
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 and foremost, it is the fact that, educated human resource is an essential asset for any nation, because, only literate people can help the country to grow more and only they can represent the nation at the global platform.
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, the authority should ensure that everybody can get the proper
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, irrespective of their financial situation.
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, even though having thirty percent of poverty in Singapore, it has the highest literacy rate and it is one of the main reasons behind the highest GDP growth of
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 country.
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, in an egalitarian society, every citizen should get equal rights, including
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, food and shelter, even if they cannot afford it. If there would be any injustice in getting
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 fundamental rights, there may be some chaos in the society. So, to live and to be lived peacefully, it is mandatory that, every student should get the university
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 and governments can help them by providing subsidies as well as offering them various kinds of loans. To conclude, despite university
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's utmost importance, some people cannot get it, just because of their monetary crisis. So, considering the importance of
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, it is the responsibility of the government to make it available for all kinds of students whether they are rich or poor.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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