In many countries, it is now illegal to advertise alcohol. Do you agree or disagree ?

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Alcoholism is a non treatable problem
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which has been facing
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with
the world so badly these days. Some nations have legal rights and ethical values which consider
alcohol
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and its
promotion
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to every extent legal and
acceptable
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accepted
by the
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side
its
the thing named or in question
it
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is considered
as illegal and to some extent non-ethical. I completely agree with the fact that it is making our
society
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unhealthy and toxic
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,
its
promotion
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should be banned in every country. The main idea of stopping its
promotion
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and advertisement is
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
limited the resources which are distributing it
openly
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open
through out
all the way through
throughout
the world. The huge market of
alcohol
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has been covered by adults and youth of the countries. Due to the fact that it is legally available in every gathering either it is some sort of party or business event, the
alcohol
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distribution is kind of compulsory everywhere. The advertising industry is promoting
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poison very openly which is causing some serious
illness
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ill
health wise and as well as mentally too.
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the idea of promoting your product in order to catch your audience attention is a healthy way of doing and establishing business ethics
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but if we look the other side of
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it is demolishing the mind of viewers.Its consumer
are getting
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is getting
caught up
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with
the idea of having
alcohol
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because these companies are planning with the minds of
individual
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individuals
the individual
. There are many health problems associated with
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habit, causing liver failure, mental illness, physical abuse, anxiety and depression. The people are easily getting addicted to
this
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drug which targeting the mind of individuals.
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toxic threat need to be stopped in order to get a healthy
society
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. The government of the every country should take immediate action on controlling the advertising agencies, they
should stopped
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should stop
the
promotion
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of
alcohol
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products
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son that
our
society
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can lead a healthy and non abusive violence free life.
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type of advertisements
are directly effecting
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is directly affecting
are directly affecting
the minds of the
society
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, which need to be stopped in order to get clean and pure environment in every
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aspect
.

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