In many countries, it is now illegal to advertise alcohol. Do you agree or disagree ?

#countries #alcohol

Alcoholism is a non treatable problem

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the world so badly these days. Some nations have legal rights and ethical values which consider

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is considered

as illegal and to some extent non-ethical. I completely agree with the fact that it is making our

society

unhealthy and toxic

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its

promotion

should be banned in every country. The main idea of stopping its

promotion

and advertisement is

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open

through out

all the way through

throughout

the world. The huge market of

alcohol

has been covered by adults and youth of the countries. Due to the fact that it is legally available in every gathering either it is some sort of party or business event, the

alcohol

distribution is kind of compulsory everywhere. The advertising industry is promoting

this

poison very openly which is causing some serious

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ill

health wise and as well as mentally too.

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the idea of promoting your product in order to catch your audience attention is a healthy way of doing and establishing business ethics

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individuals

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habit, causing liver failure, mental illness, physical abuse, anxiety and depression. The people are easily getting addicted to

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toxic threat need to be stopped in order to get a healthy

society

. The government of the every country should take immediate action on controlling the advertising agencies, they

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