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Capital punishment is essential to control crime and violence in the society. Without enforcing capital punishment like death penalty out life would become less secure and the number of crime and violence in the society would increase. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Capital
punishment
 has always remained a topic of debate. Many people think that, enforcing
death sentence
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the death sentence
a death sentence
 will open doors to
crime
 free
world
.
Few country
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A few countries
Few countries
 like Dubai execute
this
punishment
 and have cut down the cases of
crime
. I agree that capital
punishment
 is an inevitable way to keep a watch on
crime
 and violence but with some exemptions. The
crime
 rate has increased to a great extent. The newspapers are filled with the news of murder, rape and terror acts. The
world
 has become less secure to live in. Juveniles are too involved in
crime
. I believe that laws should be enforced to stop
crime
. No apology should be granted for the ones who commit
this
 heinous
acts
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act
. There are many groups where people are trained to conduct terror activities throughout the
world
. Their minds are manipulated and filled with anger and revenge. They brutally assault people for their own benefits. No mercy should be shown to
such
 assassins.
Such
 criminals should be hanged till death.
This
 will in turn make other criminals fear
law
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the law
.
However
, I would pause by saying that before giving punishments,
lot
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a lot
 of factors should be considered. There are cases where a person kills the criminal to save himself; a rape victim who looks a realist cannot be considered a dreaded criminal and be hanged. The law system should
also
 be
such
 that no lawyers could find a loophole and help a criminal.
For instance
, the convicts of rape case in 2012, are still undergoing
trails
the act of testing something
trials
 and pleading for forgiveness. The verdict in
this
 case still awaits. I believe, special consideration should be given to juvenile
deliquents
guilty of a misdeed
delinquents
 and the reasons behind their act be found and by counselling should be brought back in the society. A mentally retarded person committing
crime
 should be exempted. I would pen down by saying that capital
punishment
 is necessary to have a
crime
 free
world
 and care should be taken no innocent people are harmed. The justice should be on fair grounds, we can take a step ahead in the zone of peace.
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