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People attend colleges or universities for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge etc.). Why do you think people attend colleges or universities?

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The government and citizens of a
country sometimes
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country, sometimes
 have contrasting views about how their
country
’s
progress
 should be measured. While I agree that economic
progress
 is essential, I believe that other forms of
progress
 are just as important. There are three key reasons why economic growth is considered by governments around the world to be the fundamental metric for national
progress
.
First
, a healthy economy
results
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result
 in a more satisfied citizenry as unemployment is lower than during periods of economic unrest.
Second
, economic
progress
 generates more tax revenue for governments.
This
 in turn allows governments to invest in social services, healthcare, education, military or whatever else they see as necessary.
Finally
, a strong economy can help a
country
 improve or maintain a
country
’s international reputation, which allows for more influence and trading power on the global stage.
Nonetheless
, other forms of
progress
 that exist independent of economic
progress
 can be equally relevant in measuring a
country
’s success. A
country
’s adult literacy rate,
for example
, can be used to measure social equality as well as economic growth potential.
This
 is because literate adults are able to partake in skilled
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 and are
also
 likely to pass on their literacy skills to the
next
 generation. Another key measure of
progress
 is how well the
country
 is protecting its natural environment. Regardless of the wealth of a
country
, it will not have a satisfied and healthy population if the environment is in ruin. Alternatively, the overall happiness of its residents can be an extremely relevant measure of a
country
’s success. In conclusion, while it is obvious that economic health is a key marker of a
country
’s success, other educational, environmental, and psychological metrics are equally significant.

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