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Q-It is foolish to get married before completing your studies and getting established in good job.Do you agree or disagree?

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It has been a very hot topic of debate amongst people that
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 should be done after completing the studies and establishing a career. I agree that it is indeed foolish to get married before completing your studies and getting a good job.
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 essay will put forward my reasons to support my stance. The primary reason to agree that
marriage
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 before its right time is indeed a foolish decision, is that, with
marriage
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 comes priority. Once a person is married, he or she has to set
different set
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a different set
 of priorities in life.
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, it is imperative to give proper time to your husband, your in-laws.
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, with
marriage
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 comes
responsibilty
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
. Once you are
married
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married, then
then
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 you have to be responsible and careful.
This
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 becomes particularly important in joint family system, where every individual has each set of responsibility to complete.
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, after kids, responsibility increases and with the passage of time it becomes difficult to cope with the burden of
marriage
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 life and studies. Contrary to
this
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, if the husband and
inlaws
a relative by marriage
in-laws
 cooperate with you after
marriage
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,
then
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 you can not only finish the studies but can
also
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 excel in your career. In conclusion, I
beleive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
 that it is better to finish the studies and establish your career, before getting married because it becomes very difficult to manage after
marriage
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.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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