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Creative artists should always have the freedom to express their ideas in any way they wish. The government should not restrict what they do. To what extent do you agree with this opinion.

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The artists have brought a considerable change for the improvement of a nation.
Hence
, the liberty should always devote the creative artists in order to express their concepts to people in any method as they want.
Therefore
, the authority should encourage them
instead
 of prohibiting their works. I completely agree with
this
 view of devoting right to the artists to express their notions by the elected officials.
First
 of all, it is an undeniable fact that a creative person has the power to combat for justice.
This
 is because these days, people have to face various social issues
such
 as rape, domestic violence and murder.
In addition
, creative artists can spread awareness via using own's creativity and motivate the people to speak against
such
 violence.
For instance
, in India, artists had composed a song against the rape of 12 year old girl.
This
 song not only gain the popularity, but
also
 enforce the law to take firsthand actions.
As a result
, she had got justice, which is only possible by an artist diligence.
Furthermore
,
although
 the creative artists do not acquire sufficient amenities from the legislation, they can accelerate the national economy. Because artists conserve the culture, tradition, sculpture of a country in the museum and art -gallery.
Hence
, the tourists arrive to explore diverse cultures which increase job employment, especially in the tourism fields and rise economic status of a nation. To illustrate, masses work as a translator and tourist guide to support the holidaymakers which not only improve their communication skills, but
also
 rise the demand of creative persons tremendously at a global level.
Hence
, the lawmaker stimulates the artist's work by providing medals to them rather than restricting on their freedom to show their thoughts. In conclusion, the creative individual's determination and diligent should be praised by the governments in order to create awareness among public and expand the prosperity of the state.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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