The charts below show the growth in the population in some of the world’s largest cities as well as the population distribution in urban and rural areas. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the growth in the population in some of the world’s largest cities as well as the population distribution in urban and rural areas.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph compares the
population
growth
in
five
large
cities
between 1970 and 2010
while
the table lists
down
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the
five
most populous
cities
in the world both in 1950 and 2010.
In addition
, the line graph analyses the global
population
in rural and urban areas.
Overall
,
Tokyo
had the largest
population
in 2010 but the
population
growth
in
Bombay
and
Jakarta
outranked other
cities
.
Finally
, more people started to live in
cities
after 2005 despite a different scenario in earlier years. As the data suggests,
Tokyo
had over 15 million residents in 1970 which was three and
five
times higher than that of
Bombay
and
Jakarta
respectively. New York and Shanghai had approximately 14 and 12 million inhabitants
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this
year. After two decades, New York witnessed a meagre
population
growth
while
it was dramatic both in
Jakarta
and
Bombay
. It is evident that
population
growth
in
Jakarta
and
Bombay
exceeded all other
cities
. In 1950, New York, London,
Tokyo
, Paris and Moskow were the top
five
populous
cities
in the world. In 2010
Bombay
, Lagos, Shanghai and
Jakarta
ranked in the list by eliminating all other
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except
Tokyo
which stood first on the chart with over 27 million citizens.
Finally
, the global urban
population
in 1980 was below 2
billion
while
3
billion
lived in villages. The
population
in
cities
grew steadily and went over 4
billion
in 2010 at which point 3
billion
global
population
resided in rural areas.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, growth, five, cities, tokyo, bombay, jakarta, billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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