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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is sometimes argued that high
school
 students should be made to do some
work
 in their local communities. While I disagree with the idea of making
such
 programmes compulsory, I do believe that voluntary
community
service
 could benefit young people. There are several reasons why I would argue against having compulsory
community
service
 for secondary
school
 students.
Firstly
, the
school
 curriculum is already full with important academic subjects,
such
 as maths, science and languages.
For example
, I remember having an extremely busy timetable when I was in high
school
, and it would not have been possible to add it.
Secondly
, students' performance in other subjects would be affected if valuable study time were taken by charity
work
 or neighbourhood improvement schemes.
Finally
, I believe that teenage students would be reluctant to take part in any programme of obligatory
work
, and
this
 could lead to poor motivation and even bad behaviour.
On the other hand
, the opportunity to do voluntary
community
service
 could be extremely positive for high
school
 students. By making these programmes optional, schools would ensure that only motivated students take part. These young people would gain valuable experience in an adult working environment, which could help to build their self confidence and enhance their skills. Having
such
 experience and skills on their CVs could greatly improve
school
 leavers' career prospects.
For instance
, a period of voluntary
work
 experience might impress a university admissions officer or a future employer. In conclusion,
although
 I do not believe having
community
service
 as a mandatory part of high
school
 curriculum is a good idea, making it optional can create a great impact on students' career.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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