Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals; during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

With the globalization, there is
an
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a
decreasing number of the cultures;
additionally
, people have forgotten the meaning behind the festivals. Some maintain that nowadays people
celebrate
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have celebrated
the festivals just to enjoy themselves but don't know the context behind it. I
smililarly
in like or similar manner
similarly
believe
this
and my reasons are twofold. For those who assert that it is not forgotten, the most important point is that some festivals became more popular and
also
became a tourist attraction, which means that there will be more and more people know it.
However
, an increasing number of people participating in those festivals
does not mean
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do not mean
that they will try to understand and remember the meaning of the festivals. One example of
this
can be seen in the Dragon festival. With technology development, it
has took
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has taken
the western countries by
strom
a violent weather condition with winds 64-72 knots (11 on the Beaufort scale) and precipitation and thunder and lightning
storm
stream
;
nevertheless
, most of
forigners
a person who comes from a foreign country; someone who does not owe allegiance to your country
foreigners
still do not know its origin and its importance for
chinese
a native or inhabitant of Communist China or of Nationalist China
Chinese
.
Therefore
, it is evident that the history of the minorities' tradition vanished gradually.
First
of all, it is an undeniable fact that some specific historical event
have been
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has been
had been
famous due to the internet development;
nonetheless
, for those minorities, their history are forgotten gradually. One reason is assimilation. A case in point is that some can't help but forget their tradition and custom in order that it is easier to adapt themselves into a culture belonging the majorities. Another reason why people forget it is that some
laguages
a systematic means of communicating by the use of sounds or conventional symbols
languages
is vanishing. It makes young adults alienate their tradition.
For instance
, in my
countries there
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countries, there
is a trend that it is
diffcult
not easy; requiring great physical or mental effort to accomplish or comprehend or endure
difficult
to communicate between the elder and
the young
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younger
adults, because the elder only speaks dialect but the young adults can not.
Therefore
, it contributes to alienation. In conclusion, above reasons elucidate the phenomenon why people have
forgetten
not noticed inadvertently
forgotten
forgetting
the meaning behind the festivals.
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  • Commercialization
  • Globalization
  • Cultural dilution
  • Traditional values
  • Secularization
  • Festivity
  • Heritage
  • Individualism vs. collectivism
  • Consumer culture
  • Intangible cultural heritage
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