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Some people from poor and rural backgrounds find it difficult to get a university education. Universities have to make it easier, especially for such groups, to get into them. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Getting enrolment for a university education is extremely challenging for the destitute and rural society's children. In order to open the educational door for them, the tertiary institution's effort should be needed. I completely agree that the colleges should devote various opportunities to the individuals who belong from the faraway places. To commence with, though the poor scholars can be restricted to embrace opportunities for pursuing a higher academic due to low financial conditions, they have a talent and creativity.
Similarly
, in rural communities, only one parent play a role of breadwinner,
hence
, it is difficult for the parents to enrol their kids in the colleges.
For example
, a recent study reveals that in Nepal, above 40% Nepalese has discontinued their studies since completing school education because of poverty. On the one hand, in order to admit talented pupils from a low family background, the university should provide scholarships for the deserving learners.
In addition
 to
this
,
although
 the students from the affluent families can easily afford the higher tuition fees, for the poverty-stricken person, it is just like a dream.
Hence
, the learning institutions ought to not only alleviate the expensive annual fee, but
also
 provide various part-time employment opportunities to chase their dreams of acquiring the tertiary level education. To illustrate, these days, the wealthy nations
such
 as Australia, Canada offer full scholarships for the academic study for eligible scholars, so that a plethora of impoverished people would move abroad for a higher study. In conclusion, despite the poor family status, the scholars could be enrolled in the educational institution provided that the institute would devote scholarships and job opportunities to the pupils.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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