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The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams illustrate, how to work
wave -
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wave-energy
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energy
 machine and
suitable
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the suitable
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 location of it.
Overall
,
System
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the System
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 is working with the help of the
waves
 on the seashore. The Design of
this
 System has two chambers that are one chamber is related to the
waves
 of the sea, and another socket is combined with turbines and
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a generator
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generator
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generators
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. With regards to the
waves
 and
water
 level
air
 flow pass through the canal to the
second
 chamber and by that, turbines rotate
voluntary
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voluntarily
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.
Similarly
,
air
 flows from outside
pass
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passes
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 inside the chamber, and other turbines rotate
also
. Meanwhile, a generator would produce electricity as depends on the power of
air flow
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airflow
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.
While
,
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apply
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 turbine rotation extra
air flow
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airflow
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 will pass outside and into the
water
 as well. Over
to
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apply
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the location of
wave
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the wave
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energy
 machine, diagrams demonstrate that there are two locations
such
 as
,
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apply
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 one in deep-sea
water
 and another in
mid sea
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mid-sea
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water
.
In deep-sea
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Deep-sea
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water
 has been too much expensive, but
which
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it
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 may produce high power of
energy
 with the help of larger
waves
.
On the other hand
,
mid sea
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mid-sea
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water
 might produce less
energy
 as compared to
the
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apply
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deep-sea
water
, because
which
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it
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 may get only smaller
waves
.
Nevertheless
, the cost of installation is low
in contrast
 to the large wave
energy
 machine.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, waves, water, air with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "wave" was used 8 times.
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