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Healthcare should always be funded by governments, and it should be always be free for people to use. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this idea?

#healthcare #governments #people #idea
In current society
,
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,
 governments accept the responsibility to furnish all people with
healthcare
Suggestion
health care
 services.
However
, the issue of payment is still controversial, and some people argue that
such
 measures should be free. Personally, I would agree with
this
 idea, but I
also
 believe that everybody should be responsible for his own
health
 condition. On the one hand
,
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,
 good
healthcare
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health care
 should be available to everyone for free. State
healthcare
Suggestion
health care
 should be paid by the government using money from taxes, since an extremely effective tax system has been adopted to levy,
for instance
,
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,
 income tax and other
taxes on
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taxes, on
 community residents, they expect the government to create funds for a wide range of
health
 services.
Nevertheless
,
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,
 everyone has access to the same quality of care and treatment
.
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.
 Since the exorbitant cost of modern medicines and services can be prohibitive in less affluent families without adequate subsidies from
health
 facilities, they can be significantly affected by devastating disruptions.
On the other hand
, free medical service makes some people irresponsible of their
health
 condition. It is believed that expensive
health
 care would force people to follow a strict lifestyle and quit smoking and drinking. In
conclusion I
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conclusion, I
 once again reaffirm my position that, I support that a government should provide free medication for people. But I
also
 believe that people should
also
 be responsible for their own life.
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