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International travel makes people prejudiced rather than broad-minded. What are its causes and what measures can be taken to solve this problem?

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It is irrefutable that international
tourism
 has taken mammoth dimensions. Unfortunately, It is irrefutable that international
tourism
 has taken mammoth dimensions. Unfortunately, sometimes, international
tourism
 creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. In
this
 essay I intend to delve into the causes of
this
 situation and suggest some ways to alleviate the problem. The most important reason why some are opposed to international
tourism
 is that tourists may unknowingly show disrespect for local culture.
For instance
, we generally cover our heads in a religious place. A tourist may not do so or take his shoes inside a temple.
This
 may offend the local people. Sometimes, youngsters may be attracted towards the western culture, which the tourists bring with them and many may find
this
 as a threat to the local culture.
Moreover
, the tourist dollar may not be helping the local people. We all know that tourists stay in five star hotels and enjoy the best facilities. They may be taking two showers a day, whereas the local people may not have enough water to drink.
This
 has been the case in Shimla, which is a very popular hill station in Himachal Pradesh, India. On top of that, when tourists buy souvenirs from local artisans, they bargain a lot. The poor artisans, who look up to tourists for their livelihood, end up earning the bare minimum.
Finally
,
tourism
 creates pollution, which helps nobody. We are all suffering the consequences of global warming. The solutions are not simple. We cannot discourage
tourism
. It is the backbone of many economies of the world.
First
 of all, the tour operators should take the onus of guiding the tourists about the main things of local lifestyle.
Secondly
, the tourists should stay with locals as paying guests.
This
 would be a win-win situation for both. Local people would earn and the traveller would taste the local lifestyle.
Finally
, environment friendly
tourism
 should be promoted.
For example
, if an elephant ride is possible, the tourist should avoid using a car. After all, a good traveller is one – who takes away nothing, but photographs, and leaves behind nothing, but footprints. Summing up, international
tourism
 does have a downside to it, but many steps can be taken to lessen the negative effects.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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