The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides information about five different ways of transport used by children to arrive to and from school in the years 1990 and 2010. Units are measured in millions.
Overall
,1990 has been characterized by a larger number of trips than in 2010, as revealed by the
datas
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data
. In terms of walking , cycling and walking
and
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bus, it can be seen that their values collapsed significantly from 1990 to 2010: the first and the
third
ones experienced more than twofold decrease, going to 6% and 3% respectively
while
the
second
fell to 2% from its original value just over 6%.
On the other hand
, car passenger has shown a
noticabily
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noticeable
growth during
this
period, reaching an increase of about 7%. As it is observed, the only method of transportation which illustrated a
slightly
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variation is the bus
one
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,showing above 7 million
of
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trips in 1990 despite the 5
millions
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registered in 2010
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trips
  • children
  • modes of transport
  • walk
  • cycle
  • public transport
  • drive
  • car
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • shift
  • convenient
  • comfortable
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • significant
  • indicate
  • reasons
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • 20-year period
  • doubled
  • considerable margin
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