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the pie charts and table give information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the us between 1988 and 2000. summarise the information and comparing

the pie charts and table give information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the us between 1988 and 2000. summarise the information and comparing
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The table illustrates the value of
fish
 ,measured in billions of dollars, which has been imported to
theUS
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the US
 in 1998,1999 and 2000,
while
 the three pie charts provide information about the amount
od
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of
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fish
 that the US brought from China,
Canada
 and other
countries
 in the same period.
Overall
, the highest price has been recorded in 2002
whereas
 in the
year
1988
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,1988
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 it can be seen
the
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as the
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 lowest expense.
Furthermore
 , looking at the different portions of the pie charts, it was observed that the percentages of imported
fish
 from each
countries
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country
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 have experienced significant changes. Regarding the table, the value of the import started at $ billion in the first
year
, increasing to 8$ in 1992 and reaching $10 in the
last
year
. In terms of
source
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the source
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 of
fish
 importation,
Canada
 contributed the most to the pie chart in 1988 (60%, ) compared to China and other
countries
 which provided only 23 % and 37 % respectively. The imports from
Canada
then
 experienced a fall to 28% in the final
year
.
Controversely
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Controversy
Conversely
Controversially
,by 1992 , other
countries
 had replaced
Canada
 as the main supplier and made up 46 % of all imports in 1992 and 42% by 2000.
Likewise
 , imports from China rose over the period
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 30 % in 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, canada, countries, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
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