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Today the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowdays
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Nowadays
, people are buying a
product
 to see in the sale
by
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of
 high
quality
 of goods and
also
 power of
advertising but
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advertising, but
 in the cell some goods are not real which they are sold.
on
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On
 the one hand advertising is more power to sell the
product
 when people going to buying something to
store they
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store, they
 see the banner for celebrity and buy a
product
 of the don't need
in addition
 to
this
 some families are low budget and
cells providing
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cells, providing
 cheaper
product
then
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 while poor families buying the goods from the
cells
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cell
 companies are
sell
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selling
 their
product
 in special occasions and give the different offer to
product
.
on
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On
 the other hand sold the
product
 in the cells that
quality
 is not good and sell the
product
 to very low price while companies are
copy
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copying
 to
original
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the original product
original products
product
 and make duplicate and sell to the market very huge marketing of the
product
 and
also
product
 marketing by the celebrity like Bollywood actors and social service and so on their
helps
either side of the body below the waist and above the thigh
hips
 to the
goods
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good
product
 buying people but the
quality
 of the products are not good and sold the goods that's not
needs
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needed
.
in
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In
 the conclusion
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
product
 selling in the cell is
quality
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the quality
 is not good and I
am agree
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agree
 with the power of advertising reflect the popular goods.
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