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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. What are some of the advantages and disadvantages of renting homes?

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With the growth of the popularity, the past decades saw there was a trend that people tend to
rent
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house
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a house
 rather than buy it. Some maintain that renting
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home
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a home
 is positive more than negative. I
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 believe
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, my reasons are twofold. Admittedly, mostly the elder could argue that the
house
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 would be the place in which they live for a long time, which can make them feel safe and satisfied.
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, comparing with those who
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 homes, people having their own homes do not need to worry about where they will stay or governments revise the policies on renting
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house
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a house
the house
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, the lake of feeling of safety is the disadvantage renting
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 makes.
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, in fact, renting
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 brings the benefits more than the drawbacks. One indisputable benefit of renting
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a house
 is the cost. The cost renting
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 is cheaper, which means people who
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 homes do not spend lots money on it.
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, with the increasing density of popularity, the expenditure of buying homes grew dramatically. A case in point is that the elder tend to have their own homes and the affluent buy lots houses as an investment, which contributed to an increase of the price of real estate so that the young adults can't help but
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 homes.
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 to the benefit, the cost, the freedom of choosing jobs is another. With globalization, the job opportunities increased, which caused the young adults have more chances to choose where they want to go to work and made job hopping common.
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, people do not need to be confined in a specific country to choose their jobs.
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, for a
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person
 preferring to work abroad renting
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 is better. In conclusion,
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buying
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buying, home
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 has benefits, renting
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 is still a better choice;
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, I firmly agree with that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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