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1. Even though globalization affects the world economies in a very positive way, its negative side should not be forgotten. Discuss.

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Globalization
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 has benefited many developing countries across the
globe but
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globe, but
 undoubtedly at the same time has impacted developed nations.
Globalization
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 has caused
major impact
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a major impact
 in terms of loss in job opportunities in the more developed countries which resulted in shift of jobs to poor, weaker nations. It has
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 caused
concentration
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the concentration
a concentration
 of wealth and power in
hands
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the hands
 of
small corporate elite
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a small corporate elite
 which gobbled up smaller competitors around globe.
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,
extensive
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extensively
 damaged is caused to environments. Greenhouse emission rose
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 of trying to curtail them.
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, weak and developing nations got top notch opportunities on their way as spread of technologies, products, jobs across the borders has fostered interdependence of nations. It
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 resulted in the standard of living in less developed countries as majority of
job
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jobs
 were outsourced to these countries.
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,
globalization
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 resulted in less operating cost as cheap raw material can be purchased by importing part from countries with zero import tax duty.
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, A car manufacturer based in Japan can manufacture auto parts in several developing countries, ship the parts to another country for assembly,
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 sell the finished car to any nation. China and India are foremost examples of nations that have benefited from
globalization
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. To conclude, in my opinion advantages of
globalization
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outweigh
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outweighs
 over its disadvantages. It’s almost necessary to embrace
globalization
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 and conduct business internationally if one wants company to be competitive in the global marketplace.

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