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1. Even though globalization affects the world economies in a very positive way, its negative side should not be forgotten. Discuss.

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Globalization
 has benefited many developing countries across the
globe but
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globe, but
 undoubtedly at the same time has impacted developed nations.
Globalization
 has caused
major impact
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a major impact
 in terms of loss in job opportunities in the more developed countries which resulted in shift of jobs to poor, weaker nations. It has
also
 caused
concentration
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the concentration
a concentration
 of wealth and power in
hands
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the hands
 of
small corporate elite
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a small corporate elite
 which gobbled up smaller competitors around globe.
Furthermore
,
extensive
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extensively
 damaged is caused to environments. Greenhouse emission rose
instead
 of trying to curtail them.
However
, weak and developing nations got top notch opportunities on their way as spread of technologies, products, jobs across the borders has fostered interdependence of nations. It
also
 resulted in the standard of living in less developed countries as majority of
job
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jobs
 were outsourced to these countries.
In addition
,
globalization
 resulted in less operating cost as cheap raw material can be purchased by importing part from countries with zero import tax duty.
For example
, A car manufacturer based in Japan can manufacture auto parts in several developing countries, ship the parts to another country for assembly,
then
 sell the finished car to any nation. China and India are foremost examples of nations that have benefited from
globalization
. To conclude, in my opinion advantages of
globalization
outweigh
Suggestion
outweighs
 over its disadvantages. It’s almost necessary to embrace
globalization
 and conduct business internationally if one wants company to be competitive in the global marketplace.

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