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Some people think that young people should choose their professions themselves. Others believe that their parents should choose for them. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Deciding on what
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 or profession to pursue are often difficult to make. It should be given some serious thoughts before making a choice because your future depends on it. Other people believe that youngsters should choose their future
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 while oth
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gues that parents should choose for them. Personally, I believe that young people should be the one to decide on what
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 path they would like to take and not their parents. One of the prerequisites for happiness is doing what you really love and what you are passionate about and one way to achieve
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 choosing a
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 path on your own. Individuals who choose their own
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 tend to become successful because they are more likely to strive to achieve excellence in a profession they like. Individuals
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 know their weaknesses and capabilities better than anybody else which enables them to make the right choice.
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, it is a common practice to some that parents choose a
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 for their children. There is no doubt that they are more experienced and have bet
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 Parents just want nothing but the best for their children, it is better that young people should make a decision for themselves because oftentimes success is not on
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 is finding your passion, doing what makes you happy and being fulfilled with what you do.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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