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Some people say that what children watch on TV influences their behavior while others say the amount of time children they spend watch TV influences their behavior. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is often argued that children content of programs watching
in
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on
television
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 can influence the way children behave
where as
on the other hand
whereas
 some others who think that it depends on the
time
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 they invest
infront
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in front
 of
television
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.
This
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 essay discusses both sides of the argument before reaching my own perspective that children manners can be affected by the programs they see in the media.
To begin
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 with
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,
people who believe that
younsters
a young person of either sex
youngsters
 behaviour is affected by the hours spent on
television
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 is mainly because of the factors
such
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 as declined physical activities as well as lack of social interaction.Investing tremendous
time
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infront
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in front
 of
television
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 can cause vision problems and overweight.They
also
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 find it difficult to communicate with peer groups for fun activities and find it comfortable to sit alone.
For instance
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,
a recent study by a medical
students
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student
 in India showed that 80% of younger generation spending more than two hours of
time
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 on
television
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 is using power glasses and suffered from obesity.
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, there
are
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is
 a group of people who considered that the
pograms
a series of steps to be carried out or goals to be accomplished
programs
programmes
 on
television
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 has
large impact
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a large impact
 on attitude of children because
,
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,
youngsters mind is like a glass for moulding and it can be easily affected and attracted by the visuals in the screen.Enormous programmes are available in
medias
a hypothetical description of a complex entity or process
models
media's
media
 including violence, history
,
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,
crime
,
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,
travelogues, culture, cartoons
etcetera
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.A child who regularly watching
documentary channel
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a documentary channel
 like national geographic will always have the curiosity to know about the general topics and tried to
findout
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find out
 books related to it after school hours
also
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.
Similarly
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,
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,
those who addicted to cartoons tried to imitate the
mannersims
a behavioral attribute that is distinctive and peculiar to an individual
mannerisms
 of his
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
 hero in the cartoons and
same
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the same
 can
happened
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happen
 with those who
regulary
in a regular manner
regularly
 watching violence
,
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they start doing all violence with the thought that it is quite natural to implement it in
norma
conforming with or constituting a norm or standard or level or type or social norm; not abnormal
normal
 life. To conclude
,
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,
even though spending long
time
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 for watching Tv influence the youngsters, I inclined to believe that the messages conveyed from the programmes they monitoring in
television
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 has huge impact on their behaviours.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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