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Education should be accessible to people of all economic backgrounds. All leveld of education, from primary school to tertiary education, should be free. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

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Education
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 is a human right for all
people
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 in the world,
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 it should be free in terms of all degrees of
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. Having taken other solutions into consideration, I agree with
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 point of view and support it for two reasons. Some individuals in the world live in poverty,
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 they are not able to get an
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. They sometimes don't have adequate money for daily food,
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education
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 is not
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their priority. Many countries in the world, see that one solution towards
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 problem is to give a free
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 for all economic backgrounds
people
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. By doing so, the government believe that I could create a better generation, better work and improve society life quality. To illustrate, Indonesia since 2005 giving
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 subsidies for 12 years from primary
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 until high
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.
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 the rate of uneducated
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 decreased 10 years later.
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, there is no exception
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 for who hardly get an
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 nowadays, it is a basic human need.
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, schools should be enrolled without seeing their academic backgrounds or economic status.
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, companies nowadays require a degree in their employee recruitment. A highly skilled ability only can be achieved if
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 a knowledge, which is commonly found at
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.
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, Germany gives a free
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 from primary to bachelor degree. It is one of their commitment to make high-quality
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 could help their country's development. In conclusion, free
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 is not only considered
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as
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a human right but
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 helps
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improve their life quality. I,
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, remain firmly convinced that
school
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 should be accessible for all.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessible
  • economic backgrounds
  • tertiary education
  • equal opportunities
  • workforce
  • innovation
  • social cohesion
  • class divide
  • government budgets
  • compromised quality
  • investment
  • future earnings
  • global competition
  • implementation
  • funding
  • administration
  • infrastructure
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