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Some countries have introduced a law to limit working hours for employers, why? Do you think is it a positive or negative development?

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Job
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 and
work
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 plays an essential role in the life of modern man due to
expenditure
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the expenditure
 of present scenario. Some nations restricted working hours for workers because of particular reasons.
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 essay will discuss both pros and cons of
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 statement in the subsequent paragraphs and
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 provide my rational opinion in the conclusion. To commence with, it gives opportunity to other masses to
work
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 in an organisation.
Old
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Older
 employees are not always familiar with new technology.
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, fresh
mind
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minded
 individuals have more knowledge among
electronic
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electron
 mobility, and they can run a factory smoothly with their intelligence.
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, numerous humans
work
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 for overtime to earn more
money
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 and they do not let their colleagues to
work
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 for more
time
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.
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, conflicts may arise among jobbers, and limiting hours for doing
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job
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the job
a job
 may reduce
such
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 issues. To demonstrate, restriction upon
time
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 for performing the duty provide every individual an equal treatment, workers will satisfy with their
job
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.
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, there are
number
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a number
 of negative impacts of working hours limitations. Primarily, some human beings have financial problems and to overcome these issues, they
work
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 for more
time
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. But restrictions on their timing of
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job
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the job
jobs
 do not allow them to earn more
money
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 to solve their economic conditions.
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,
number
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a number
 of individuals do jobs for improving their financial situation. But
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 policies
does not let
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do not let
 them
satisty
meet the requirements or expectations of
satisfy
.
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, various countries allow labourers to
work
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 only for 40 hours a week. The remaining
time
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 is leisure for them. And to have more
money
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, masses can put wrong steps
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 as theft. They may become criminals later. To illustrate, employees spend their spare
time
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 for doing a particular
job
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,
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, they prefer wrong ways to for
money
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. To conclude,
although
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 limitation on
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job hours
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the job hours
 may have some
negitive
characterized by or displaying negation or denial or opposition or resistance; having no positive features
negative
 effects, but there are more opportunities to provide employment to unemployment persons. I personally opine that there are more positive impacts on jobbers and organisations by restricting
work
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 hours.
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