Nowadays parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed. What is the reason for doing this? Is this a negative or positive development?

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POPULATION OF WORLD IS INCREASING DRASTICALLY
AS A RESULT
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THERE IS GREAT COMPTETION FOR JOBS AS WELL.UNDER
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WORLD FULL OF COMPTETION PARENTS ARE TRYING THEIR LEVEL BEST TO ADD CHILDREN IN THAT RACE WHERE THEY CAN SURVIVE IN
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A BETTER WAY
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DEVELOPMENT PARENTS WANTS THEIR CHILDREN AT BEST POSITION IN THEIR LIFE.FOR
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PURPOSE THEY SEND THEM IN BEST SCHOOLS.TEACH THEM OTHER SKILLS AS WELL LIKE SINGING
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SWIMMING
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PAINTING.THEY PRESSURIZED THEM TO GET BEST GRADES
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TODAY
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CHILDREN START GOING TO SCHOOL AT VERY YOUNG AGE IN PAKISTAN SCHOOL START GIVE ADMISSION TO CHILDRENS AT AGE OF THREE.PARENTS COMPTETIVE ATTITUDE PLAY VITAL RULE FOR
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ATTITUDE.RATHER THAN DISCOVERING THEIR ABILITIES THEY START COMPAIRING THEM WITH OTHER CHILDREN OF THEIR AGE.AS RESULT THEIR GIFTED SKILL NEVER GET CHANCE AND THEY BECOME AVERAGE GROWING YOUNG MINDS. EXERTING TO MUCH PRESSURE HAS SERIOUS NEGATIVE IMPACT AS WELL.IT CAUSE SERIOUS MENTAL ILLNESS.A REPORT SAID THAT IT IS MAJOR CAUSE OF DEPRESSION AND
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IN SOME CASES LEAD TO SUCIDE
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IF U PUSH YOUR CHILD TO EXCEL THEY WILL LOSE THEIR SELF ESTEEM
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SOME THEY ADOPT NEGATIVE WAYS TO GET GOOD GRADES. I CONCLUDE MY ESSAY ON
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POINT THAT RATHER THAN PRODUCING CREATIVE SKILLED MINDS
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ATTITUDE DAMAGE THEIR ABILITIES FOR EVER
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SO RATHER THAN ADOPTING TYPICAL FORMULA OF SUCCESS PARENTS SHOULD OBSERVE THEIR INTREST AND HELP THEM TO FOLLOW THEIR PATH.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Excessive pressure
  • Academic achievements
  • Professional success
  • Secure future
  • Social comparison
  • Competitive environment
  • Psychological impact
  • Stress and anxiety
  • Resilience
  • Work ethic
  • Emotional well-being
  • Supportive parenting
  • Achievements
  • Life skills
  • Balance
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