Nowadays parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed. What is the reason for doing this? Is this a negative or positive development?

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POPULATION OF WORLD IS INCREASING DRASTICALLY

AS A RESULT

THERE IS GREAT COMPTETION FOR JOBS AS WELL.UNDER

THIS

WORLD FULL OF COMPTETION PARENTS ARE TRYING THEIR LEVEL BEST TO ADD CHILDREN IN THAT RACE WHERE THEY CAN SURVIVE IN

BETTER WAY

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A BETTER WAY

. I WILL EXPLAIN IN MY ESSAY BOTH ASPECTS OF

SUCH

DEVELOPMENT PARENTS WANTS THEIR CHILDREN AT BEST POSITION IN THEIR LIFE.FOR

THIS

PURPOSE THEY SEND THEM IN BEST SCHOOLS.TEACH THEM OTHER SKILLS AS WELL LIKE SINGING

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SWIMMING

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PAINTING.THEY PRESSURIZED THEM TO GET BEST GRADES

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TODAY

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CHILDREN START GOING TO SCHOOL AT VERY YOUNG AGE IN PAKISTAN SCHOOL START GIVE ADMISSION TO CHILDRENS AT AGE OF THREE.PARENTS COMPTETIVE ATTITUDE PLAY VITAL RULE FOR

SUCH

ATTITUDE.RATHER THAN DISCOVERING THEIR ABILITIES THEY START COMPAIRING THEM WITH OTHER CHILDREN OF THEIR AGE.AS RESULT THEIR GIFTED SKILL NEVER GET CHANCE AND THEY BECOME AVERAGE GROWING YOUNG MINDS. EXERTING TO MUCH PRESSURE HAS SERIOUS NEGATIVE IMPACT AS WELL.IT CAUSE SERIOUS MENTAL ILLNESS.A REPORT SAID THAT IT IS MAJOR CAUSE OF DEPRESSION AND

THAT EVEN

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THAT, EVEN

IN SOME CASES LEAD TO SUCIDE

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IF U PUSH YOUR CHILD TO EXCEL THEY WILL LOSE THEIR SELF ESTEEM

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SOME THEY ADOPT NEGATIVE WAYS TO GET GOOD GRADES. I CONCLUDE MY ESSAY ON

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POINT THAT RATHER THAN PRODUCING CREATIVE SKILLED MINDS

SUCH

ATTITUDE DAMAGE THEIR ABILITIES FOR EVER

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SO RATHER THAN ADOPTING TYPICAL FORMULA OF SUCCESS PARENTS SHOULD OBSERVE THEIR INTREST AND HELP THEM TO FOLLOW THEIR PATH.

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Excessive pressure
Academic achievements
Professional success
Secure future
Social comparison
Competitive environment
Psychological impact
Stress and anxiety
Resilience
Work ethic
Emotional well-being
Supportive parenting
Achievements
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Nowadays parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed. What is the reason for doing this? Is this a negative or positive development?

Fully explain your ideas

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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people tend to believe that all young adults should undertake a period of unpaid work for the good of community. Do you agree or disagree?

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