Nowadays it is common for people to get married and have children in their thirties rather than when they are younger. Do you agree or disagree that this trend will benefit society?

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For
From
the past decade people following the trend
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of
getting married in their thirties not in their twenties.
this
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This
made some
people
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peoples'
worries and others shows interest with
this
kind of mentality.
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my
belief I
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belief, I
strongly agree with the couples getting married at
age
of thirty or more.
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preceding all others in time or space or degree
First
of all, from
government stats
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the government stats
it is known that an average person gets more financial
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to exert much effort or energy
strain
usually at 25.
This
factor plays a very important role in
everone's
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everyone's
everyone
life,
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will strong money wise make
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was strong money wise made
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things so easy from getting a house, buying a car, or paying insurance every month.
IN addition
, people stay more stressed when they see that they are running out of cash.
working
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Working
long hours just to pay the monthly expense is not the right option to choose.
secondly
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Secondly
, with
age
a person has more knowledge about
world
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the world
and can deal with any problem somehow, whereas chances are more that a young
age
guy will not handle a problem so well.
with
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With
family comes a big
responsibilty
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
responsibilities
of managing and carrying forward a healthy life. People get married at 18 start working for their family without having proper qualification end up in a low wage job and end up doing mundane activities for years.
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At
In
last
, it will make
population gap
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the population gap
.
if
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If
suppose there is a decade gap and people are getting married late
,
Accept space
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having
having h
kids after the marriage.
this
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This
will give a pause in population boom.
a
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A
person getting married at
age
of thirty will have maximum two kids to have a simple life.
if
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If
everyone
have
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has
kids at
age
of 22 there will be no room for the growth of a child and the competition would be more.
as
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As
every year 20000 students graduate from university which make job search hard and retirement is 65.
in
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In
conclusio
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
, everyone has a choice,
this
is a free world.
the
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The
only thing I believe the effect of
this
trend would be seen in
next fifteen years
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the next fifteen years
.

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