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Although the prices of fuels have greatly increased over the last decade or two, it is argued that further increases in fuel prices are the only way to reduce world consumption of fuel and lesson pressure on worlds fuel resources To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Fuel
 is a diet for cars
,
Accept space
,
buses
,
Accept space
,
trains
,
Accept space
,
aeroplanes and boats which requires on
daily basis
Suggestion
a daily basis
. Some offenders believe that to decrease world
consumption
Accept comma addition
consumption, fuel
fuel
 prices should be increased
;
Accept space
;
However
, Many opposed
these statement
Suggestion
this statement
these statements
, I agree with the people's who says to
rise
raise the level or amount of something
raise
 the price of petrol is useless because there are some alternatives that can be helpful for reducing
fuel
consumption
 Proponents, those
argue
Suggestion
arguing
 that
fuel
 can be one of the best
way
Suggestion
ways
 to reduce world usage, these will make people think twice
wether
introduces two alternatives
whether
 to use their personal vehicle
however
, price hike should
also
 be analysed before taking
such
 decisions. Price of petrol will overall inflation.
Furthermore
, it will cause trouble for daily commuters and
schools
Suggestion
school
 students,
this
 will result in a skewed supply chain relationship of petrol as a commodity. There are other alternatives that the government could explore to curb in
fuel
consumption
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consumption, for
for example
, government should give advertisement to promote public transport
furthermore
, there should rule like
European country
Suggestion
a European country
 that
on
Suggestion
at
 rush hour,
fuel
 consumed
vehicals
a conveyance that transports people or objects
vehicles
 are restricted in cities in result, these will create less pollution as well as traffic issues will
also
 be solved.
Hence
, national council must research on other sources of
fuel
 or more focus should be done on electric cars in term, which will not harm the environment and
consumption
 of
fuel
 will
also
 be reduced. To sum up, hike in
fuel
 price will reduce somewhat of
consumption
, government must explore other alternatives which indeed not harm nature and the natural resources will
also
 be less consumed.
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