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The young today spend a large amount of their leisure time in shopping centers. It is feared that this trend can bring negative influences on the youths and the society.

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Observation has concluded that the majority of people think in a manner that new generation are consuming their free
time
 in malls and markets.
That is
 formidable and
this
 tendency can carry a bad impact on young individuals as well as society.In my viewpoint, I completely agree with above notion which is explained in
further
 paragraphs. Among the many arguments put forward by those who support the above viewpoint, including myself, perhaps, the most plausible one is related to over purchasing. To be more precise, normally people attract with discount and advertisement and buy unnecessary product.
Thus
, it is a waste of money
additionally
 people not justify the value of money.
Furthermore
, the
second
 idea is relevant to learn new skills or enhancing their education.
In other words
, students or younger public that
time
 diverts into their study or gain a new skill rather than wasting
time
 in a shopping mall.
Thus
, teenagers should spend more
time
 towards learning
On the other hand
, foremost claim put forward by those who oppose the above notion is bargaining for things. It means, younger people when purchase something that
time
 they can decide the value of the product and they can learn about market experience.
Therefore
, the ability of recognising a product may help in upbringing of the children. All in all, young generation more
time
 passes on shopping.
This
 essay has discussed about unnecessary purchasing and enhancing the skill of individuals.
However
, knowing about the market is
also
 important so it cannot be neglected in the future.

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