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Although the prices of fuels have greatly increased over the last decade or two, it is argued that further increases in fuel prices are the only way to reduce world consumption of fuel and lesson pressure on worlds fuel resources To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is argued that increasing he
price
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 of
fuel
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 is one of the most important ways to reduce world consumption and lessen pressure on the world's
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 resources.
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, in my opinion, I completely agree with people who says to raise the
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 of petrol is worthless and there are more alternative ways can be helpful.
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, I don't think soaring the
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 of
fuel
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 is going to solve the problem.
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 of that, people will continue to use it with bitterness. In fact, due to the increasing in
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 may lead to rocket up in other
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-fired cost like transportation, creating detrimental effects on other sides
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 as traffic issues and the economy. From my point of view, it would be sustainable if we use renewable and eco-friendly
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 like solar power, wind power and hydro power to run vehicles and factories,
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 enhance the quality of the environment.
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 will assuredly encourage the citizen to travel by cheap trams, buses and other environmentally friendly transportation.
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, the government could explore to curb the
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 consumption,
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, in some European countries and China, they restrict the number of vehicles allowed during rush hours and in certain times.
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, they can cut down the amount of petrol used. In conclusion, hike in
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price
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 is not really a great way to deal with the problem. I believe not only the government, but
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 everyone should consider carefully before making any decision.
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