In schools and universities, girls tend to choose arts while boys like science. What are the reasons for this trend and do you think this tendency should be changed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Observation has concluded that
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girls
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select arts
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boys take the science
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in school and University. There are many reasons for
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occurrence. In my
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trend should be changed. Among the many reasons
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an elective course in educational life, perhaps, the most plausible one is related to
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mentality of society. To be precise, some people think that
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should not go outside of work.
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, in
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some individuals have a narrow mindset they believe that
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should not
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to learn hard branches of education.
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, the second reason is relevant to interest
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subjects and
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.
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, women are more interested in designing and that type of activity than men.
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survey illustrates fashion design and
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another art related job
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art related
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job mostly chosen by
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female
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females
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.
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, more
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admission seen in
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field
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.
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foremost argument from those who support
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trend should be changed, including myself is related to gender equality. It means
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and boys have the same rights in
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education and secret their fields and I
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notion.
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section does not depend on sex because scientists
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accept that every human
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the same mind so everyone can study
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it
science
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.
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, Kalpana Chawla was an astronaut,
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and the first woman of Indian descent to go to space.
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, Hakim is one of the
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hair artists in India.
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,
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of
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field
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fields
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is not dependent on gender. It is a part of the choice. In conclusion, females prefer the arts,
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make
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take
technology
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regarding
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field
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because of
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mind set
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and interest
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the subject and
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this
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trend will
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due to
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gender equality.
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