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University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Give reason for your answer and include relevant example from your experience or knowledge

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It is believed by some people that the educational system in their home country is flawed.
As a result
, the number of people studying overseas has steadily increased.
Although
, it is expensive to acquire a degree in a foreign country, students who travel abroad to study gain valuable life experience. In my opinion, people who travel to study are better off because find it very easy they adapt to difficult situations. The main advantage of studying abroad is the quality of education students
achieve
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achieved
achievable
. These
help
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will help
 them to be successful in their career in the future.
For instance
, while obtaining a degree in the UK, I learnt some
microsoft
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Microsoft
 office skills which I currently use to carry out my tasks at the office which has helped me to excel in my career.
However
, the main disadvantage of studying in a foreign land is the cultural shock and
language barrier people experience
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a language barrier people experience
. Students are made to learn new a language before they can start their course, which makes the learning period longer than usual.
Also
, they are expected to adapt to the culture if their new environment in other to associate with build and build relationships. In summary, there
is
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are
 a significant number of people travelling abroad to study. I believe that the language and cultural barriers student tend to face, which enables them to adapt to difficult situations is in itself an advantage.

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