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You have a problem with a recently hired employee in your workplace. Write a letter to the HR manager. In your letter: describe the problem the new employee has caused explain how other employees bout the new employee's conduct say how you expect the HR manager to address the situation

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to bring to your attention an issue connected to
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 employee, who was hired
last
 week. Let me explain the situation to you.
Firstly
, the problem started about a month ago when he disrespected a female colleague with vulgar words. That day, everyone thought that he did wrong, but recently he has been rude to everyone.
In addition
, he does not follow the rules of the company as he always starts work late in the morning.
Therefore
, everyone in the organization is unhappy with
this
 behavior and every
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 in the workplace
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 uncomfortable with
this
 attitude.
For
this
 reason, I am contacting you and I hope you have
this
 conversation with him, in order to notify him about these situations. By the way, I am optimistic you are able to solve and improve these issues. I am looking forward to your answer. Yours faithfully, Samandar
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coherence cohesion
Ensure a clear opening statement, outlining the main purpose of your letter. Strengthen logical connections between paragraphs to enhance your letter's flow. Consider adding a brief introduction about the employee's role or time at the company for context.
coherence cohesion
Utilize a variety of sentence structures to express actions and consequences more vividly. Use precise vocabulary to describe the employee’s behavior and its impact more accurately.
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Provide specific examples of the employee's behavior to clearly demonstrate the problem. Suggest potential solutions or express your expectations more clearly from the HR manager to address the situation.
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Maintain a professional tone throughout your letter. This includes using polite language and formal expressions. You effectively communicated respect and professionalism in your closing.
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