One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expentency is increasing. Do u think the advantages outweight the disadvantages?

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In the modern era
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,
with the help of improved medical care the
life
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expectancy of person is
increases
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increasing
increased
and they are living better and
long
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longer
life
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.I personally believe that though it is a mixed blessing
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,
but it has more negative implications. Looking at
bright side
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the bright side
, there are some reasons why some say it is advantageous. The foremost one is old man can get more time to enjoy their
life
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.
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, many people want to roam around the
world but
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world, but
due to paucity of time
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,
they are not able to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
their desire.
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, youngsters got opportunities to learn new skills from
old age experienced person
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the old age experienced person
old age experienced people
an old age experienced person
.
they
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They
also
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came to know about their religion, culture and rituals
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,
which helps
younsters
a young person of either sex
youngsters
to remain connected with their roots. The dark side of
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development must not be ignored.
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Firstly it
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Firstly, its
Firstly its
effects on the population of country as death rate decreases
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overpopulation results in major issues
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as poverty and unemployment.
Moreover
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old age experienced person do not
left
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leave
their job
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, youngsters cannot get jobs and have to face
lot
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a lot
of difficulties.
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,
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the demand for food and shelter
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rises which result in deforestation.For more food farmers should have
to
being one more than one
two
grown large hectares of wheat crops. Having discussed merits and demerits, l would like to conclude increasing
life
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span is counterproductive to society at large and it will fuel major problems
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as overpopulation and deforestation.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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