Some people believe that elderly parents ought to live at senior homes. Other believe that they should live with family members. Do you agree or disagree?

Many individuals assert that seniors should reside in old age homes,

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others believe that living with the family members of

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tenure is more apt for them. I believe

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that love and affection are

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vital for senior citizens than

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professional care. In

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essay, I would argue

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seniors should spend

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crucial period at home only. On the one hand, challenging physical circumstances require them the

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24/7 professional support. As with growing old,

physical

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condition of the body

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deteriorating

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it needs someone urgently in many

of

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circumstances with professional

equipments

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to cater

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emergencies.

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, a report published by the NHS, states that, if on time first aid treatment

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as

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Oxygen

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been provided in those serious conditions, 30% of the lives might

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saved in

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5 years. On the flip side, to overcome

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challenging physical circumstances, sometimes psychological support plays a vital role too or even more effective than professional care.

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homely environment, where they can spend their pleasure time with kids and

adults

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family members, they sometimes forget their misery too, in their company. They cherish those moments, which eventually

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a bigger role in their health improvement, which sometimes could not be cured with medicines or professional care at old age homes.

To sum up

, I conclude that professional help is of great importance for elderly people, but it is the psychological support of family members

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caring environment, which is very helpful for the betterment of senior citizens who might already have gone through the long medication process, but which could not achieve the best of results for them.