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Some people become famous in their early age? Is it a good or bad thing.

#people #age
Individuals are becoming more popular in many fields from their young
age
. If asked,
such
 trend is likely to be a negative scenario.
This
 essay will discuss various arguments, which are narrated in forthcoming paragraphs, to prove that being popular
at
Suggestion
as
 an early stage of
life
 will be compromising for them.
To begin
 with, personal
life
 of people becoming well-known at a young
age
 could be disturbed. Since,
public starts
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the public starts
 gathering around these people, they are not able to travel freely at any place.
For instance
, child artist famous through
small screen
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the small screen
face
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faces
 huge difficulties while playing in
garden
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the garden
a garden
gardens
, which forces them to stay in designated areas only.
In addition
, they will be socially deprived. While they are busy in
they
of them or themselves
their
 daily schedule from the early
age
, they are not only able spent time with their family members, but
also
 could not make friends in
life
.
For example
, kids debuting in movies could not either visit
school to make
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school, make
school make
 friends or share memories with family, which can destroy their social
life
.
Finally
, they are usually prone to security. As these celebrities are
sourrounded
confined on all sides
surrounded
with
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by
crowd
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a crowd
crowds
the crowd
, security guards are always required around them for their protection for any clashes or rush that arise from their fans, else they might get injuries. To cap it all, young humans are facing many problems, if they come out to be well-known in the community from their young
age
. In conclusion, from the above arguments, it can be justified that locals
recieving
get something; come into possession of
receiving
 popularity from the beginning of their
life
 is not an appreciative situation, as they might need to compromise their personal and social
life
 as well as could face security problem.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Legal age
  • Marriage
  • Maturity
  • Stability
  • Individual choice
  • Freedom
  • Cultural practices
  • Religious practices
  • Education
  • Career aspirations
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