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Some people think that having a set retirement age for everybody regardless of occupation is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire certain age limit agree or disagree

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Retirement
 is an
age
 when an individual takes
rest
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the rest
from
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of
 their
work
 and gets paid for her services have done for
Har
of a female
her
 company. Some socialist think that having a same
age
 limit for
retirement regardless
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retirement, regardless
 their profession is not
satisfy
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satisfied
satisfying
. I agree with
this
 statement in my essay I give my opinion in the favour of
this
 question.
To begin
 with that
people
Suggestion
person
 become weaker when they grow older. Certain
type
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types
 of a circle whose are related
with
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to
 labour class or Le man, they need to more physical
strength
 than workers do's perform
mentally task
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mental tasks
mental task
a mental task
. If we say in both conditions required similar
age
 limit for
retirement
this
 is not fair.
Elevar
 who lift heavy equipments. They cannot able to perform his task after 50
.
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.
if
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If
do
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done
this
 can cause health
issue but
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issue, but
 an employee who ever
work
 on
computer
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the computer
a computer
 and
work
 mentally his
work
 up to the
age
 65
.
Accept space
.
 So in both conditions equal
age
 limit of
retirement
 is controversial. And other reason is that which individual have been
done
Suggestion
doing
work
 from long time have a right to take
retirement
 and
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 her dreams working with long duration his efficiency level to perform
work
 is becoming low. We say that a young person has new ideas and more
strength
 than
old
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an old age employee
the old age employee
old age employees
age
 employee who have been
work
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working
from
Suggestion
for
of
 many years. For illustrate young generation is more capable to handle computers Android and Smartphones sector. They are used to do with phone apps and online apps In
conclusion we
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conclusion, we
 can say
retirement
age
 is same for all
work
 type is debatable. in the condition where
work
 is need to Physical
strength
 ,there
retirement
age
 should be fixed to 50 and Other Side where
work
 is related with mental
strength
then
age
 of
retirement
 should be 65 or more

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