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Demand for oil and gas is increasing and so finding new sources in remote and untouched areas is a necessity.do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, using oil and gas as crucial
energy
 resources are increasing all around the world. We should find other
energy
 resources for our future
use
. Some individuals believe that using renewable
energy
 can be a great substitute for human being consumption.
it
Suggestion
It
 is undeniable that it can be beneficial in some aspects.
Overusing
Suggestion
Over using
 of combustion resources causes depleting them in the early future and they cannot be
substitute
Suggestion
substituted
 easily because they produce from the fossils of some living thing after some hundreds or even a thousand years.
Moreover
, using these kinds of fuels lead to serious air pollution. In major cities with a population of over one million people,
this
 has become a concerning issue and governments should find appropriate solutions for
this
 critical matter. Utilizing renewable energies can be a suitable choice for the replacement of using oil and gas. Wind power is one of the most important that humans have not to
use
 it
wholely
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
wholly
.There are many undiscovered windward lands all around the world that people can produce electricity by installing some powerful turbines in them. Another important renewable
energy
 is
radiation
Suggestion
radiant
radiating
energy
. Humans can produce power with the help of some special plates that convert the radiation
energy
 into electricity. These plates act like batteries that save
energy
 inside them. Some advanced countries have been using
this
 kind of
energy
 from past decades. People should
use
 sunshiny lands to produce an illimitable source of
energy
. All in all, there are several undiscovered lands in different parts of the world that can be used for generating
energy
 through them. I completely agree to apply these lands for
further
use
 in the future.

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