Some people believe that elderly parents ought to live at senior homes. Other believe that they should live with family members. Do you agree or disagree?

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belief

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that seniors should

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at old age homes,

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others,

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the notion that living with family members in those later years is apt for them. I believe

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that love and affection are

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vital factors for senior citizens than

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professional care. In

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seniors should spend

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crucial tenure at home only. On the one hand, challenging physical circumstances

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dedicated 24/7 professional support. At

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age, the physical condition of the body

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deteriorating,

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it needs someone to

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care, always with professional assistance to cater the emergencies, if they occur.

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, a report published by the NHS, states that, if on-time first aid treatment

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Oxygen

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been provided in these emergency conditions, 30% of the lives might

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saved in

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5 years. On the flip side, to overcome

such

challenging physical circumstances, more prone to occur at

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stage, the psychological support part plays a vital role too or

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more effective than professional care.

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, homely environment, in the company of kids and

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of

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family members, they tend to forget their misery during those moments. The cherishing moments spent with them

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a bigger role in health improvement, which might sometimes could not be cured with medicines or professional assistance at old age homes.

To sum up

, I conclude that professional help is of great significance for elderly people, but it is the psychological support from their near and dear ones, which is very helpful for the betterment of their help, who might already have gone through the long medication process, but could not achieve the best of results for them.