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Many people have difficulty maintaining a healthy diet. What are the causes of this problem? How could it be solved?

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A healthy
diet
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 is significant in human life. People get trouble to manage their healthy
food
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 due to some circumstances. People do not prefer healthy
food
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 because of availability and more cost, while public
awareness
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 is the best solution to the problem. People face many problems having healthy
food
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. Most of the people preferred
junk
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food
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 rather than healthy
food
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 in the meal because processed foods are easily available in their region. To
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illustrate
, most employees choose
junk
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food
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 at lunchtime, due to availability of the
junk
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food
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 in restaurants near the companies. Cooking healthy diets require more money as compared to processed
food
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. Some fresh vegetables and fruits require, which are very costly, for cooking one cuisine.
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, to illustrate,
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 as, making a breakfast dish, which based on our
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nutritional
 requirements, expenditure was higher. So,
junk
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food
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 easily accessible and that low cost, are reasons for not having healthy
food
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. Many solutions are available to
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 problem, but public
awareness
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 is an efficient solution for them. The government has to cooperate with the public and arrange some
awareness
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 programs. In the program, the government should include the benefits of
junk
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food
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 and how processed
food
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 impact our life.
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,
awareness
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seminars arrange
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seminars, arrange
 in schools as well as public places, so students
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 recognize the solutions.
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,
awareness
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 of the public with the seminars about their meal is the solution to the problem. In conclusion, people must have to think about
diet
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 and its impact on the human body.
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 the cost of a healthy
diet
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 and not available in every place, both are the main reasons for not having a healthy meal, the government should give information about the
diet
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, so people might choose the proper
food
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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