If a product is sold and people buy it, then advertising is not necessary and can be considered a kind of entertainment. Do you agree or disagree with this?

An announcement intended to inform people about a specific

product

, service or employment opportunity is known as advertisement. Advertisements play an important role in achieving the sales target of any

product

Thus

, I strongly agreed that advertisements are necessary to aware customers about the pros and cons of any

product

or service. (52) We had seen in the past that people buy all the products and services directly from markets or institutions. There was no concept of advertisements in many parts of the world until the invention of information technology in

19th century

Suggestion

the 19th century

. (40) Presently, the trend of advertisement is spreading all over the world. Nowadays, advertisements are necessary in order to attract the attention of customers towards new products and services.

For example

, all the mobile companies used massive advertisements to motivate consumers towards new models of cell phone with latest features.

Similarly

, in

garments industry

Suggestion

the garment industry

garment industry

, advertisements not only inform people about the new design and latest

fashion but

Accept comma addition

fashion, but

also

play a major role in attaining their

sale

Suggestion

sales

targets. (76) The recent development in Science and information technology has enabled the people to buy any

product

online over the internet. All the international brands have advertised their products online in order to facilitate the people.

Thus

, if the people keep on buying advertised products,

then

it will surely become a compulsory element in the sale of any

product

in near future. (61)

Thus

, I strongly believed that advertisements are a great source of getting

consumers

Suggestion

consumers'

consumer's

attention and to achieve sales targets of any

product

even if the

product

is sold and people buy it. (32)

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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product differentiation
innovation
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