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Economic growth is the only way to end world poverty. However, some people say it leads to environmental damage and should be stopped. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The increase in the amount of goods and services produced per head of population over a period of time is measured in terms of economic
growth
. It is true that economic
growth
 plays a vital role in eliminating the
poverty
 of any country.
Thus
, I strongly agreed that the benefits of economic
growth
 are far greater than its damages on the part of
environment
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the environment
. (64) We had seen in the past that people had limited resources and
thus
 lead a very simple life. They had fewer occupations and lack of education. In short, the process of economic
growth
 was really slow in the past. (39) Presently, it is doubtless that uplifting economy and reducing
poverty
 is a major goal of every country. Nowadays, economic
growth
 is not only boosting the socioeconomic standards of any
nation but
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nation, but
 it is
also
 contributing a lot in reducing the
poverty
 of the
world
.
For example
, if the production of goods and services in any country matches the needs of its residents,
then
 is
economy
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the economy
 is automatically jumped high.
Similarly
, the economic
growth
 is produced more opportunities for people and prevent them from falling
in
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into
poverty
. (86) The recent development in the
world
 economy,
although
, has generated some environmental issues like cutting of forests, clearing land for housing,
however
, it
has play
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has played
 a major role in uplifting the social and economical standards of people all over the
world
.
Thus
, if the countries keep on growing
economically
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economies
 in a positive way,
then
 the
world
 will soon get rid
from
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of
poverty
 in the near future. (66)
Hence
, despite its few environmental concerns, economic
growth
 is the best solution to end
world
poverty
. (16)
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