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Some people think that having people from different nationalities and cultural background living together in the same country develop faster. Do you agree?

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There is debate whether having people from different nationalities and cultural backgrounds living together in the same country allow for a faster development on a national scale. I completely agree that diversity
amony
in the middle of
among
cistizens
a native or naturalized member of a state or other political community
citizens
 is a great benefit due to multiple reasons which I will explore in the essay below.
First
, exposure to different cultures be it in the way an individual dresses, eats, practice his/ her religion encourages tolerance.
Moreover
, statistics reveal that children are less likely to be bullied at a school where the majority of students come from different backgrounds.
Also
, when one is raised in an environment where it is normal to work and study with people who look and act differently than one's own cultural heritage, it becomes less likely to judge a person's value based on appearances alone.
On the other hand
, there are some who would argue that these same differences can actually instigate conflicts rather than tolerance.
However
, I disagree with
this
 statement because
histroy
the aggregate of past events
history
 has proven that wars have arisen only when nations chose to embrace seclusion
instead
 of inclusion. A stark example is Hitler's WWII beliefs of building a nation based on a single race. While Nazi Germany quickly
crumbled both
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crumbled, both
 economically and socially
,
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,
 countries
such
 as the United States of America and Canada which are built by people who immigrated from different regions of the world are still rising globally. To surmise, countries whose populations showcase different cultures have the advantage of developing faster due to the following reasons
such
 as promoting tolerance among their citizens and decreasing the risk of international conflicts because of their ability to embrace the " others"
.
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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