In many developing countries, there are major problems with the quality of air and water from both industry and construction. What problems has this created ? What solutions could be provided to prevent this?

In many growing nations, the main issues are with the standard of
air
and
water which
Accept comma addition
water, which
are released from both production house and building site.
This
essay will
first
suggest that biggest problem caused by
this
phenomenon plays significant role in harming
human’s
Suggestion
human
health as
air
and
water
are polluted, and to overcome
this
both of them should not dispose polluted
water
and are directly into
environment
Suggestion
the environment
. The foremost difficulty caused by polluted
water
and
air
results many diseases
such
as lung cancer, typhoid and breathing related problems.
This
is because
air
and
water
are
basic requirement
Suggestion
basic requirements
the basic requirement
of humans without it human cannot survive. From polluted
air
that is
released from
factory
Suggestion
the factory
and when it comes in intake of human it will effects
to
Suggestion
of
respiratory system and makes them weak.
Moreover
, if contaminated
water
is used by people for
drinking
Accept comma addition
drinking, then
then
they will suffer from
water releated dieseas
Suggestion
water related diseases
water related dieseas
a water related disease
water related disease
water releated disease
like typhoid. A possible solution to
this
problem would be to dispose impure
water
and
air
after
purifing
serving to purge or rid of sin
purifying
purging
it.
Although
refining impurities
costs
Suggestion
cost
more money, it will save
human’s life
Suggestion
a human’s life
.
This
is because
thesedays
Suggestion
these days
there are certain methods are developed to remove impurity from
air
and
water but
Accept comma addition
water, but
to save money industries are not doing that so
government
Suggestion
the government
should keep eye on them. To illustrate, in India, the study based on 2 years of close observation discovered that 80% of industries are disposing
water
and
air
as per
officials
Suggestion
official
guidelines. Due to
this
medical issues are reduced. To conclude, impure
air
and
water
results to human health
strightly
In a right line; not crookedly
straightly
where as
on the other hand
whereas
there are certain methods to prevent
such
impurity.
Submitted by vm20012016 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: